Nobody cares about your product if they don’t believe they have a problem. |
That’s why most emails that pitch the product fall flat. Especially when you’re selling something new or nuanced. |
Here’s an example from a client that sells a recruiting automation tool: |
Bad message: |
“Save hours per week using our AI-powered recruiting assistant.” |
Better message: |
“Most hiring managers are still spending 5–8 hours per week screening resumes manually. We found that most of them don’t realize how much qualified talent they’re missing because they can’t get to every applicant in time.” |
This reframes the product from "automation" to "talent loss". A much harder problem to ignore. |
Here’s another example from a client selling an internal knowledge platform: |
Bad message: |
“Centralize your company knowledge in one easy-to-use platform.” |
Better message: |
“Most teams don’t realize how much time they waste answering the same internal questions over and over. When knowledge lives in Slack threads and individual brains, scaling breaks down fast. Especially when onboarding new hires.” |



